Anne in Ellabur -preface+Chapter 1

Anne awoke with loud yawn and stretched her hands to the ceilling.”Good morning, Isabelle,” She greeted her sister who was hanging up some freshly clean clothes in the closet.

“Morning Anne, aren’t you late to work?” Isabelle says deeply concerned.

Anne looks at the clock..”Yikes! I am.”

Pull clothes on her and grabs a on-the-go sandwich and catches the subway to her job as a Secretary for a book company. Anne was glad that she had the night off . Ordinarily at night, Anne worked at theaters as an actor.(she has been in Romeo and Juliet, Mid Summer’s Night’s Dream, Oliver!, and Les Miserables). Today she had no roles to fullfil and there wasn’t anything interesting to watch at any of the nearby theaters. So instead she sat down with a good book the Phantom of the Opera for the fifth time. Its nighttime in the Phantom and two soon-to-be retired managers of the opera were holding their final gala. Anne has always wondered


Its interesting to think that Phantom of the Opera, Beauty&the Beast (both Disney’s and the oringal), Frankenstein and Hunchback of Notre Dame all have the same them as Coplin sings in Disney’s Hunchback of Notre Dame of “Who is the Monster and Who is the man?” Well in Mary Poppins and Peter Pan have the same idea of parents who ‘don’t have time’ for children. It also is no wonder that the same ideas that can be found in those stories and in Shakespeare plays generation after Generation the same ideas are still there.

After while she closes the Phantom and starts getting ready for her jog.

Outside the building colorful leaves of autumn fell on her head as Anne jogged through the town, her red hair flowing behind her in the wind. As she jogged, the leaves cracked and crumbled under her feet on the very less used street . Amid the crackling, she heard an unfamiliar voice come from behind her. Amid the crackling, she heard an unfamiliar voice come from behind her.

“Anne,” The voice called.

Anne quickened her pace now running, almost sprinting on the street. Suddenly, she fell into an open sewer and yelped.

-Chapter 1-

Fighting her way out of the sewer, Anne looked around her. She had ended up near two dainty little cottages on either side of her. Both looked cozy and friendly. She saw in the distance a very large and aged castle peaking out of the hills beyond. It’s walls were a dank grey from what she could see and their were statues in the front that from here looked as if they were hardly human.

She turned around and was shocked to find behind her and the cute little cottages and sad, dead forest. The trees were bared and had a look of complete despair to them. As Anne finishes coming out of the hole in the ground, she hears a rustling in the bushes.

“Who’s there?” She calls. With a slight chuckle, a little fairy makes her way out of the bushes.

Deb replies “I’m a fairy called Deb. I protect any newcomer here and guessing by that strange garment* of yours you are a newcomer. People aren’t nice to foreigners in these hard times, so you will need to get a proper change of garments. What is your name? Where do you come from? .”

The little fairy had small, shining transparent wings on her back and lovely flowing gown. Her short, brown hair blew slightly in the wind and she smiled sweetly at Anne.

Anne says “My name is Anne Brown. I come from a place called Ontario. Where am I exactly?”

“This is a land known as Ellabur,” Deb replies, “and I’m afraid this is a very terrible time for us living here.”

“Oh? Why is that?” Anne asks curiously

Anne says “Do you know anywhere I could stay for the night?” Deb replies as she borrows some peasant girl dresses from a nearby cottage. “yeah I do come this way” as Deb walks into the forest. Anne follows Deb.

Deb begins to tell Anne of her land’s woes. “Many years ago, an evil, cruel man named Karan Raven, took over Ellabur and made himself King. It is said that he slaughtered the royal family, but no one knows for sure. They have all been missing since he took over, including the prince, but their bodies were never found. Only myself and a wizard named Warlock know where the prince is. As you can see, our land has also experienced a great famine. Warlock and an elemental he has controlled by the name of Thunder have tried to control the weather to cure our lands, but it has only worked in one area. I’m taking you there now as a matter of fact. Anyway, King Karan has been taxing heavily and ruining our country. He has built a castle on each land in our province to keep us all under his watch constantly-even though he is usually stays in one castle. The one you just saw.”

Soon Deb and Anne came to a moss covered thatch roof small cottage.

Deb shouts into the room “Warlock I have a guest here who needs a place to stay.”

Warlock shouts back “I’m coming Deb!” and then comes into view a long blue robe with a matching pointy hat and a white beard and staff. Warlock says “who is this young lady?”

Deb introduces “ Mistress Brown this is Warlock, Warlock this is Mistress Brown, a newcomer here says she comes from a strange place called Ontario.”

In the room they entered there was books scattered everywhere, dirty dishes still on the table and an unmade bed.

Anne than takes the clothes that Deb borrowed earlier and went into the one free bedroom to change. In the meantime Deb and Warlock talk.

Deb says “Remember the prophecy that Mistress Blake made?”

Warlock answers “Yeah I do remember that”

Deb “Do you think she, Mistress Brown, is the one?”

Warlock replies: “Mistress Brown might be the one in the propchery but it depends on the two falling in love.”

7 Responses to “Anne in Ellabur -preface+Chapter 1”

  1. Biotic_Warlock Says:

    I really like this starter, keep writing (:

  2. hollythestrange Says:

    Great idea! Sounds like the makings of a great fantasy novel! Maybe I should post the first chapter of my story on my blog for feedback. However, mine is nowhere near as good as yours sounds like it will be!

  3. Moonstar Says:


  4. John Says:

    Too long for me to read. 🙂

  5. blunote Says:

    It starts out great and you ended the first chapter with some suspense. I think I need to play catch-up though. It helps that I know who the characters are. 🙂 I might read some more chapters (I think I saw some) before kickoff time.

  6. I am Coco Says:

    Needs photos, Too many words.

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